On the Positive Side, here are reviews and critical comments my screenplays have received.
Critic's Review
The Page Awards
First, about the reviewer:
DS is an award winning author and has been a professional screenwriter since 1999. He has worked for studios such as Warner Bros., Lionsgate, Intermedia, Gold Circle and After Dark Films. He has also represented the management firm Circle of Confusion at numerous screenwriting conferences and pitch-fests, where he has listened to hundreds of pitches and read countless screenplays in search of new writing talent. DS has served as a Judge for the PAGE Awards competition since 2009.
His Comments
PREMISE
A thriller/horror story about a defense attorney and a prosecutor who stumble upon a conspiracy in the justice system involving supernatural forces.
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The premise is great, I really like the premise for this movie. I love this premise and would love to see a horror movie like this. Very strong.
DIALOGUE
...very natural sounding and often snappy dialogue.
The dialogue was often sharp and right to the point.
...your dialogue seems to fit each character,
PACING
the pacing of this screenplay was solid. You do a decent job of keeping the story moving. For the most part your scenes are never too long.
STYLE/ TONE
descriptions were clear, and all the geography and actions easily understood. The style of your screenwriting is pretty standard, the read was smooth.
THEME
Another very strong element of your screenplay are the classic themes that track
through your entire story. Justice, morality, secrets, family legacy, and more.
Your screenplay is nicely underscored by these relatable themes that add depth and
greater impact to your story. It touches on some very relatable and topical themes. A very strong work.
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CHARACTERS
Your character work is pretty solid. I could visualize everyone.
This is worth pursuing – keep going!
Big Break Screenwriting Contest
Reviews:
"This film is wonderfully novel on a conceptual level. Setting a judiciary backdrop is a brilliant idea.
The plot is blessed with interesting twists and turns, shocking us at every juncture of the script.
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If the mysterious death in the beginning doesn't scare us, the bits in the latter half of the screenplay, most definitely keep us at the edges of our seats.
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The script never fails to surprise us, giving us what is truly an unpredictable story.
What I particularly loved about this script is that you've injected an investigative track.
It's a supernatural horror with all the elements of an investigative thriller. It was a riveting read indeed."
(Big Break Screenwriting contest)
